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Plasma_Wolf
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 Posted: 21 Nov, 2009
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I don't quite understand, but that is not because you didn't give me enough information. Think about it, I'm sure it will occupy you for a week, making the time you have to wait for me and dots bearable. 
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Q.Star.111
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Posted: 21 Nov, 2009
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Quote: It bugged him. Dostya could fire her last shots now, before her ACU exploded. She could just as well make the UEF commander fire his last shots. The problem was that Leython had no intel and thusly he had no control.
Should be thus. Thusly is not a word.
Oh, and yeah, very good chapter. Can't wait to see where you will take this.
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Plasma_Wolf
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Posted: 22 Nov, 2009
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Thanks, I didn't know that and the word spelling checker failed. The firefox spelling checker DID see it as an error
Anyway, it is edited.
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Plasma_Wolf
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Posted: 28 Nov, 2009
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Chapter 6, Twilight Princess is up now!
I got some music for you guys 
johnmyates wrote: Plasma_Wolf wrote: ex-wife?  Perhaps I should elaborate. They are in conflict. They know each other well from past interaction. The situation can deteriorate rapidly and get VERY ugly when two individuals who know each other well start fighting. The story just has that "feel" to it. And yes, I have a couple of them.  Marc I gave you a hint that probably confused you a bit. Chapter 6 should make it all clear
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Posted: 28 Nov, 2009
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Applause. Now comes the fun part.
Keep up the good work. Looking for more,
Marc
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splattedone
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Posted: 28 Nov, 2009
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Can't wait for more. Really, this is getting really good.
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patton5219
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Posted: 28 Nov, 2009
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splattedone wrote: Can't wait for more. Really, this is getting really good.
indeed it is. i bet this conversation is gonna have some awkward moments
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Plasma_Wolf
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Posted: 05 Dec, 2009
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Chapter 7, Walking barefoot is up.
I know I don't have to say it anymore, but: Enjoy!
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Posted: 06 Dec, 2009
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Intriguing. The story line is good, and I like where it's going.
Side note: Without actually having met you, I think your writing reveals as much about you as it does about your characters. It reveals a certain "innocense" that is quite refreshing. Your older reading audience will understand what I'm talking about. You should save this piece and read it again in 10 years. I think you'll be pleased with yourself.
Grammar time:
Quote: all is imbibed with confidence, strength, skill, awareness.
imbued
Please keep up the good work,
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Posted: 06 Dec, 2009
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Quote: Side note: Without actually having met you, I think your writing reveals as much about you as it does about your characters. It reveals a certain "innocense" that is quite refreshing. Your older reading audience will understand what I'm talking about. You should save this piece and read it again in 10 years. I think you'll be pleased with yourself.
I get what you mean too , I must say, without realizing it at first, this story is a mixture of my fantasy and real experiences. There's nothing in here that really happened in my real life, but you know what I'm talking about.
The error's fixed, thanks
No one else replied yet 
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Posted: 06 Dec, 2009
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Plasma_Wolf wrote: No one else replied yet Well duh, you put it up while I was asleep . I'll probably have to read it tomorrow though, today I'm fairly busy.
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Posted: 12 Dec, 2009
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splattedone wrote: Well duh, you put it up while I was asleep . I'll probably have to read it tomorrow though, today I'm fairly busy. Don't DARE to be asleep now! (although you probably are).
Chapter 8 is up!
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Plasma_Wolf wrote: splattedone wrote: Well duh, you put it up while I was asleep . I'll probably have to read it tomorrow though, today I'm fairly busy. Don't DARE to be asleep now! (although you probably are). Chapter 8 is up! 2:42 AM here, im up to read this.
now to actually read it.
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Posted: 12 Dec, 2009
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Greetings, loving the story. Actually, registered just to let you know that I look forward to it and check for updates at least twice a day.
Was wondering ever since the second story if Leython would ever get to meet Marisa, and was glad to see it was planned for
Keep up the wonderful work Plasma_Wolf!
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Posted: 12 Dec, 2009
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Very nice. I really like how this is turning out.
Marc
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Posted: 12 Dec, 2009
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Plasma_Wolf wrote: splattedone wrote: Well duh, you put it up while I was asleep . I'll probably have to read it tomorrow though, today I'm fairly busy. Don't DARE to be asleep now! (although you probably are). Sorry mate, not about to wake up at 5:42 on a Saturday for anything short of my house burning to the ground  . But hey, I'm only a few hours late reading it this time...
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Posted: 13 Dec, 2009
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A fine chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next.
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Posted: 20 Dec, 2009
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Chapter 9 is up, enjoy!
I hope that I can upload chapter 10 next Sunday, but because of Christmas and the LAN-party I have at the 23rd and 24th, I am afraid that I'll fail.
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Posted: 20 Dec, 2009
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Plasma_Wolf wrote: Chapter 9 is up, enjoy!
I will, don't worry. Plasma_Wolf wrote: I hope that I can upload chapter 10 next Sunday, but because of Christmas and the LAN-party I have at the 23rd and 24th, I am afraid that I'll fail. That's fine, enjoy yourself, don't worry too much about us .
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Posted: 20 Dec, 2009
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splattedone wrote: Plasma_Wolf wrote: Chapter 9 is up, enjoy!
I will, don't worry. Plasma_Wolf wrote: I hope that I can upload chapter 10 next Sunday, but because of Christmas and the LAN-party I have at the 23rd and 24th, I am afraid that I'll fail. That's fine, enjoy yourself, don't worry too much about us . (:mrgreen:)
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Posted: 20 Dec, 2009
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Nice chapter. Have a Merry Christmas. We can wait for the story.
Marc
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Plasma_Wolf wrote: Chapter 9 is up, enjoy!
I hope that I can upload chapter 10 next Sunday, but because of Christmas and the LAN-party I have at the 23rd and 24th, I am afraid that I'll fail.
Great chapter, i like how your books mesh pretty well with Dots works. and chess in an ACU, something a little different.
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Posted: 20 Dec, 2009
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Hmm, interesting battles coming soon?
I look forward to it.
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Plasma_Wolf
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Posted: 21 Dec, 2009
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Q.Star.111 wrote: Hmm, interesting battles coming soon?
I look forward to it.
I have no real idea what I'm going to do next.
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Posted: 28 Dec, 2009
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Chapter 10, Era of Evil, is up!
Hope you guys don't mind reading blue and italics text, since I'm going back in time again 
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