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The identity of said Cybran will remain a mystery for now. Rest assured, however, that his presence was a cornerstone in Bagby's life!

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And yes, this is a cruel, cruel taunt. It's my evil side :twisted:

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BulletMagnet wrote:
i don't believe this new recruit is the current Redfog that we all know and love; IIRC the previous Red. kidnapped the current way back when he was a potential Aeon ACU pilot and it involved a rather large amount of pain and fire. hence why our Red. has a mask and armour and stuff, and this new mysterious Assumpta is not is said mask.

i'll go look for the exact section, but it's a lot of books to read.


I was assuming it was when he was still young and unscarred, and that all the wounds and the mask and the cybernetic limbs came later through his hellish struggles, however I'd forgotten about that part of his story, with him originally being a UEF citizen who was captured and converted by the Aeon, and then turned Cybran if I remember correctly? (No wonder he's so twisted lmao)

So yeah unless it was just after he was turned Cybran (that would explain the machine complex) and was still unscarred despite any previous toils, it can't be him if he's still quite young.

Will just haveto wait and see. Dots yer a bugger. :P

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First chapter update: if my revision efforts tonight work well, I should have it online this evening! I'd like to say that its to reward everyone for their patience and such but well... we all know what comes out on the 13th :P

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First chapter update: if my revision efforts tonight work well, I should have it online this evening! I'd like to say that its to reward everyone for their patience and such but well... we all know what comes out on the 13th :P


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Chapter 1 Diner plans is now online!

Don't let the title fool you, I start this one with a bang!

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patton5219 wrote:
dotswarlock wrote:
First chapter update: if my revision efforts tonight work well, I should have it online this evening! I'd like to say that its to reward everyone for their patience and such but well... we all know what comes out on the 13th :P


tell me you dont play WOW.
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No, no, no, no, no!

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Heh, no, nope, nadah, niet, no way.

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Noooooo....

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Yes :oops:

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1st.

LMAO! Wrestling, sure sure.

this seriously could be the best book yet! i need another chapter.

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dotswarlock wrote:
patton5219 wrote:
dotswarlock wrote:
First chapter update: if my revision efforts tonight work well, I should have it online this evening! I'd like to say that its to reward everyone for their patience and such but well... we all know what comes out on the 13th :P


tell me you dont play WOW.
SAY IT AINT SO!!


No, no, no, no, no!

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Heh, no, nope, nadah, niet, no way.

...

Noooooo....

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Yes :oops:


its ok, my friends and bro convinced me to come back a few weeks ago, but we should all quit.


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Impending Flashback Alert!

Nice start to the new book dots. I'm loving it already.

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Just awesome, im really thinking next chapter is flashback chapter :D, Bagby is the greatest!!! and how Keith just says "you clearly dont know who Bagby is, and few are alive today that know what he's capable of" was just awesome!!!


MAOR!!


edit: so you play WoW huh? now that i look at your name i can see that, and i makes sense XD, its ok, as long as you not one of those OMGOMGOMGRAIDRAIDRAIDINSTANCEINSTANCEEPICEPICEPIC people then your ok, BUT WE STILL EXPECT A TIMELY RELEASE OF CHAPTERS YOU CANT ABANDON US!!1!11!!

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Nice Chapter, Nice Title for the book.
Need More.
Soon.
VERY Soon. :D

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Thanks for the update. :P


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Quote:
"Taking a bit of time to grab a bite and stretch her leg is not that big of a deal now is it?"


Should be "legs" :P


And heh wow that was quite an explosive and unexpected start to the book. :D

When I began reading the first bits I assumed most of the chapter was going to be everyone talking to each other in the base and so on like the last book, with maybe a small operation. So I was wondering where the hell the Sepharim were, and thinking that although the character development and so on was nice in the last book, the overeall situation was supposed to be everyone being on the run, constantly hunted by the Sephies and their allies.

Then BANG! in they came, fecking everything up as usual and roasting absolutely everything despite the small advancements in technology the Alliance had made. Yeah there was enough upgraded ground defenses there to actually take down a bomber, wheras the Earth ones got totally pwnd and couldn't do crap, so that shows improvement, but the Sepharim are still the badasses and kicked some *** with everyone else legging it as soon as they could. Brilliant change in pace there, especially as it was so unexpected due to how it started. :D

Also oo Bagby's on the run, with his Sweetheart too, (lol I wonder how appreciative she'll be after this ;O) I assume he'll survive but probably will haveto go through hell first, especially with a Sephy SCU after him, that predicted exactly where he'd escaped to, and I'm sure Bagby hasn't forgot the beating the last one gave him, despite him being master of SCU "hand to hand" combat.

Liked how Dostya called in the favours too, showing just how popular and important Bagby is, and fitting in with the Cybran's style as described in the information thread.

Although such things just amuse and don't bother me, I can see a few turning their noses up at the gay-humor part, but there wasn't really anything that was too bad or degrading there so itl be reyt I guess as long as people take it as light humor, it didn't go too far or seem too unprofessional. :P

Overall nice chapter. Bit of character and situation development (Loyalists getting closer with the Coalition, has the UEF/Cybran alliance been officially named that yet? I can't remember when it says in the timeline) a nice twist and some Sephy pwnage, reminding everyone of the overall situation in that they're still on the run and getting owned. And some badass reminders of Bagby's potential too, (he must have been in a randomly good mood earlier on in the chapter, possibly just cause he was looking forward to taunting Flinn. :P)

So aye, uber thanks for the chapter, hope ya keep it up with more in yer awesome style. This was a great start. :)

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Epic.

You might want to capitalize "past" in the title. And add "A" at the beginning of the title, as well. I, know, I'm a perfectionist. :)

But otherwise, it was awesome. The Gay part escpecially.


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ZOMG! Epic cliffhanger... :o

Drat you Dots! How long must you keep us on the edge? *cry*

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Would Tim be helping Dostya to save Bagby too ?


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Commander Bob wrote:
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"Taking a bit of time to grab a bite and stretch her leg is not that big of a deal now is it?"


Should be "legs" :P




Fixed, thanks!

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CommanderDude wrote:
Epic.

You might want to capitalize "past" in the title. And add "A" at the beginning of the title, as well. I, know, I'm a perfectionist. :)

But otherwise, it was awesome. The Gay part escpecially.


Adapted the title although I added an "s" to past instead because *scrambled*.

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Swiss Knight wrote:
ZOMG! Epic cliffhanger... :o

Drat you Dots! How long must you keep us on the edge? *cry*


For a long, long while :P. I probably could use a "master cliffhanger" sig or something :P

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John117xCortana wrote:
Would Tim be helping Dostya to save Bagby too ?


Nope.

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dotswarlock wrote:
Swiss Knight wrote:
ZOMG! Epic cliffhanger... :o

Drat you Dots! How long must you keep us on the edge? *cry*


For a long, long while :P. I probably could use a "master cliffhanger" sig or something :P


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Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo,

I vowed after finishing the last book that I would wait until this book was finished before reading it.

Instead I got suckered in, and now here I am waiting for more.

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An update concerning the next chapter: it is well under way and will be ready by friday. I'll be out of town this wednesday and only return very late on thursday (and I'll be too tired to post, heh).

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patton5219 wrote:
dotswarlock wrote:
patton5219 wrote:
dotswarlock wrote:
First chapter update: if my revision efforts tonight work well, I should have it online this evening! I'd like to say that its to reward everyone for their patience and such but well... we all know what comes out on the 13th :P


tell me you dont play WOW.
SAY IT AINT SO!!


No, no, no, no, no!

...

Heh, no, nope, nadah, niet, no way.

...

Noooooo....

...
...
...

Yes :oops:


its ok, my friends and bro convinced me to come back a few weeks ago, but we should all quit.


Recruit a friend is pure pwnage. I did 1-60 on 3x xp, including quest XP. I get 20k xp in Northrend, compared to 20k in STV on 3x.

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DeadMG wrote:
patton5219 wrote:
dotswarlock wrote:
patton5219 wrote:
dotswarlock wrote:
First chapter update: if my revision efforts tonight work well, I should have it online this evening! I'd like to say that its to reward everyone for their patience and such but well... we all know what comes out on the 13th :P


tell me you dont play WOW.
SAY IT AINT SO!!


No, no, no, no, no!

...

Heh, no, nope, nadah, niet, no way.

...

Noooooo....

...
...
...

Yes :oops:


its ok, my friends and bro convinced me to come back a few weeks ago, but we should all quit.


Recruit a friend is pure pwnage. I did 1-60 on 3x xp, including quest XP. I get 20k xp in Northrend, compared to 20k in STV on 3x.


im all but done with that game, im waiting till x-mas for WAR. in the meantime i dick around a bit without wotlk


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